It’s been a while since I participated in a flash fiction challenge over at Carrot Ranch, and I especially liked this week’s prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that features a balloon.
I don’t know if this features a balloon, but one is definitely there. Enjoy!
Mylar
Panting, I finally reach the cliffs my brother loved. A cold drizzle pelts my face. Wasn’t the coast supposed to be warm?
I step to the edge overlooking the Pacific. My brain can’t comprehend its enormity. No wonder Andrew wanted to live here.
Gently, I pull the bottle from my coat pocket. As I prepare to scatter Andrew’s ashes, something shiny catches my eye – a deflated Mylar balloon, tangled in a shrub on the side of the cliff. I can see only one word: Grandma.
Someone, somewhere, likely released that in her memory.
At least Andrew won’t be alone.
Allison Maruska 
I liked your story as well. There was great emotion in so few words.
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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Very good, Allison. I would never have connected a balloon and the scattering of ashes.
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Thanks! 🙂
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Something that seems celebratory can become a poignant reminder of loss. I like your use of mylar in your flash. Good to see you at the Ranch!
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Thanks! Good to be back. 🙂
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Sad to be farewelling a brother. How we look for meaning in small ways to shield us from the pain.
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It’s something we all relate to.
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Captures that sense of meaning sought from coincidence or happenstance. Reflective of emotions felt by a brother for his brother. Poignant. We seek truths and resolution. Powerful piece.
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. 😊
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Thanks very much for responses to my post replies. It’s very positive to have feedback. Very Best wishes for the New Year – late, I know, but I’m into a draft novel copy and time can loose context. You probably understand how this is. Best Wishes, Colin.
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